Throughout the duration of this college essay, I would say I grew most in my imagery use. I wanted to create an essay in which I would be able to not only tell a story, but also express how I overcame my struggles, as well as how I grew. It was especially hard to make my essay flow gracefully together with the use of the imagery and information I wanted to incorporate. This paragraph was from my first draft, "My junior year, I interned at the local library with an author, Brooke Smith, and I had the task of writing one thousand words everyday. It was hard and stressful, if I’m being honest. Juggling the work I was doing at the library, and finding the time to write those thousand words, was difficult. Half of the time I didn’t know what to write or how I wanted the story to turn out. I started to not care about what I was writing or if there were any mistakes, and just wrote, without stopping and without distraction. It was really interesting to see how long it took for my creative juices to get flowing, as well as when that stopped. Forcing myself into writing something that just isn’t there, doesn’t work for me. It ends up sounding feigned and unappealing." I found it to be long, uninteresting and ineffective. Feedback that pushed me to revise was to show, rather than tell, how I was feeling and what I was doing. So, I did a combination of both. "The thousandth heavy sigh escapes my still lips, satisfied with the amount I have written, but disappointed with how much farther I have left to go. Sweaty palms rest dubiously on the edges of my mouse pad, fingers resting on the the keyboard, encouraging my fingers to write more." is an example of the imagery usage I had throughout my essay. In order to allow my essay to be more successful, I had asked multiple peers to critique my essay and asked questions such as "How can I make this flow better?" and "What could I do to make it more engaging?".